COMMENT 1
1)-It is related because the crime has to pay at a time, sometimes it
gets away with it buy most of
the time gets
punished.
2)a- I thimk the time situation now a days(one word)___ is horrible and worrying because the family or the adults don´t speak with the teenagers. Adults do not think of their actions and the consequences___ that these leads but sometimes it is because they want to break the rule by (for) funny.
2)b- To think to help the situation is that parents talk with them and do what is right and what is wrong. That as adults do not lead astray.(NOT CLEAR)
4)- In my opinion i think the teenagers don´t think about the consecuences. they think to do is good but they are grown.(NOT CLEAR) They could do better things as finding a job or going to a club but they see that reality and the future that carry theirs acts.(NOT CLEAR). An as i said parents and families should talk to them to understand what happens to them and what_____ their problems. sometimes the teenagers do this acts because they think____ is funny and intresting.
Very Good Job Francisco! Be careful with the things I have corrected.
Your mark is an 8.
(eight)
COMMENT 2
I think young people
today are much changed,____ are heavily influenced by
drugs cigarettes and much more, ,____
are very rebellious and very crazy and I
think they need more education of
parents and that they can put more limits,____
them not to do what they are doing, killing, raping.
Because the one the reason teenager crimes was to make to poverty (NOT CLEAR) and lack of culture and job and study That leads young people to get high(DO YOU KNOW THE MEANING OF THIS PHRASE?) and kill and many people.
Because the one the reason teenager crimes was to make to poverty (NOT CLEAR) and lack of culture and job and study That leads young people to get high(DO YOU KNOW THE MEANING OF THIS PHRASE?) and kill and many people.
Rocio C.: Some phrases are
copied from somewhere because they are not very clear. Be careful because this
is plagiarism. Please, REWRITE this piece of writing.
Your mark is a 5.
(five)
COMMENT 3
1- many teens commit crimes becuse
in their homes_____ doesn´t
educate beacuse they didn´t
go to school, they drugged, etc. in his
chilhood _____ had a problem that they were so hicier???.
3.a-one of the many reasons for juvenile delincuency is for a poverty. another reason is that they are driven from their homes at an early age. (Did YOU write this sentence?)
b- to help they would have to do comunity service or go____a rehabilitation center for drugs.
4- in my opinion the fault lies with teens and parents for having failed raised them as it should. on the other hand_____ also to blame justice to commit the crime because they are released and would have to go to jail
3.a-one of the many reasons for juvenile delincuency is for a poverty. another reason is that they are driven from their homes at an early age. (Did YOU write this sentence?)
b- to help they would have to do comunity service or go____a rehabilitation center for drugs.
4- in my opinion the fault lies with teens and parents for having failed raised them as it should. on the other hand_____ also to blame justice to commit the crime because they are released and would have to go to jail
Nice Job Martin! BUT Be
careful with PLAGIARISM.
Your mark is 7. (seven)
A) I think the reason that the teenages
are most involved to commit crimes are because
the society. (NOT CLEAR) Nowadays there are a lot of people that transgress
the laws. The teenages
live without limits and in most cases the absence of the family where the loss
of valves is something that
isn´t important por anyone.
B) The education, the education is based in the teenages´s life. The boredom leads to want to try new things, so i think that the_____ teenages need is keep their life bussy, either practice any sport, go to school, or only one thing that they need is a new group of friends.
COMMENT: In my opinion the age it isn´t impornt. The teenages should to pay for all the damage that they commite. And the parents should be the first charge??? to search the consequences, because many times aren´t present and all people of this age need the affection of their family.
So i think a lot of time the teenages only create this type of things because they feels alone and they only want_____ attract attention.
The teenages _____ not only the criminals so many times_____ are victims of crimes.
B) The education, the education is based in the teenages´s life. The boredom leads to want to try new things, so i think that the_____ teenages need is keep their life bussy, either practice any sport, go to school, or only one thing that they need is a new group of friends.
COMMENT: In my opinion the age it isn´t impornt. The teenages should to pay for all the damage that they commite. And the parents should be the first charge??? to search the consequences, because many times aren´t present and all people of this age need the affection of their family.
So i think a lot of time the teenages only create this type of things because they feels alone and they only want_____ attract attention.
The teenages _____ not only the criminals so many times_____ are victims of crimes.
Florencia: Some phrases
are copied from somewhere because they are not very clear. Be careful because
this is plagiarism. Please, REWRITE this piece of writing.
Your mark is a 6. (six)
COMMENT 5
1) It's related because it says that if you commit a crime you won't win
nothing and, sooner or later,
you will have to pay the crime that you committed
3) A. I think the increase in teen crime is due to misconceptions that society has today, especially teenagers. They strive increasingly to fit into society. They want to feel the adrenaline of committing an illegal act and they think they are "cool" for committing it. Drugs, alcohol and family problems and / or problems at school also influence exceedingly on the actions of these.
3) B. I think parents and the government should take serious measures in this regard.
For example, the government should punish them with community service, jail them in juvenile detention centers, and so on.
Parents should take more seriously their children(word order “their children more seriously), they must listen, educate, advise and help them.
4) Teenagers seek to feel part of something, feel that we are popular, invincible, that we can do what we want because we are minors. We don't measure the consequences, because we believe that we will get away with it.
Also, I believe the thefts are mostly due to the need to acquire things that aren't essential for us(not necessary), we just want them because we want to be trendy.
Moreover, the relationship with our parents and problems at school, in conjunction with the use of drugs, alcohol and other psychological issues, _____ lead teenagers to commit crimes, usually in an unconscious way.
3) A. I think the increase in teen crime is due to misconceptions that society has today, especially teenagers. They strive increasingly to fit into society. They want to feel the adrenaline of committing an illegal act and they think they are "cool" for committing it. Drugs, alcohol and family problems and / or problems at school also influence exceedingly on the actions of these.
3) B. I think parents and the government should take serious measures in this regard.
For example, the government should punish them with community service, jail them in juvenile detention centers, and so on.
Parents should take more seriously their children(word order “their children more seriously), they must listen, educate, advise and help them.
4) Teenagers seek to feel part of something, feel that we are popular, invincible, that we can do what we want because we are minors. We don't measure the consequences, because we believe that we will get away with it.
Also, I believe the thefts are mostly due to the need to acquire things that aren't essential for us(not necessary), we just want them because we want to be trendy.
Moreover, the relationship with our parents and problems at school, in conjunction with the use of drugs, alcohol and other psychological issues, _____ lead teenagers to commit crimes, usually in an unconscious way.
Excellent Job Gisella! Your
writing skills are awesome! I know I cannot grade you but this would have been
a sure 10! Keep up the good work!
We can give a lot of charity to all this families,
but this is not going to solve much, we need more help from the authorities
Well
Done Guadalupe! It shows that you’ve written it all! Keep up the good work!
Your
mark is a 9. (nine)
COMMENT 7
1) its related because if you commit a crime maybe you get something but
anytime you can be caught or will have to pay for it.
3a) I think teens commit crimes because in some cases their parents dont take care of them or because they dont have a good education. Sometimes teens commit crimes because they use drugs,etc.
b) To help that situation i think parents should talk with teens and prove them that is not necesary_____ do that.The government must control things like alcohol and drugs to prevent more crimes and force teen criminals to do community service or allow them conditional freedom(parole).
4)Teens commit a big part of all crimes.. in my opinion it is because they have problems with their family , personal problems or because they feel that people dont provide them enough atention, so they keep to the crime like a way of distraction.Also i think some teens commit crimes just for fun.
Anyway.. i think teens that commit crimes should be punished by the law or the government. With different methods they have to learn to value other's things and how to gain their own things.
3a) I think teens commit crimes because in some cases their parents dont take care of them or because they dont have a good education. Sometimes teens commit crimes because they use drugs,etc.
b) To help that situation i think parents should talk with teens and prove them that is not necesary_____ do that.The government must control things like alcohol and drugs to prevent more crimes and force teen criminals to do community service or allow them conditional freedom(parole).
4)Teens commit a big part of all crimes.. in my opinion it is because they have problems with their family , personal problems or because they feel that people dont provide them enough atention, so they keep to the crime like a way of distraction.Also i think some teens commit crimes just for fun.
Anyway.. i think teens that commit crimes should be punished by the law or the government. With different methods they have to learn to value other's things and how to gain their own things.
Awesome Job Matias!! I
could totally see that you’ve written it all without the need of any extra
help!
Keep up the good work! Your
mark is a great 10! (ten)
COMMENT 8
1- Criminals are punished for their crimes because with this form they
learn don’t do crimes.
2- Actually delinquency is a grand problem because boys and girls more Young start to steal and commit crimes, this problem normally are caused because they don’t receive a good education in their houses or because they join with bad people. _____ Problem state is that doesn’t punish the minors, detained as much one day and then released in this way_____ don’t learn.
3- A- One reason can be drogs or bad education
B- Punish adolescence or do thing for common benefit.
4- Delinquency arrived far away, _____ exist cases where childrens start stealing things in the school, then they consume drogs and can finish kill somepeople. People can have a psycholgy problem and can be trate, but when parents don’t do nathing, children do this things, _____ is very important_____ act now, the more time pass the consequences will be worse. Sometimes some people steal for tendence, because in this society if one grope of people do some, all do the same. We should teach to children since kids the difference between good and bad.
2- Actually delinquency is a grand problem because boys and girls more Young start to steal and commit crimes, this problem normally are caused because they don’t receive a good education in their houses or because they join with bad people. _____ Problem state is that doesn’t punish the minors, detained as much one day and then released in this way_____ don’t learn.
3- A- One reason can be drogs or bad education
B- Punish adolescence or do thing for common benefit.
4- Delinquency arrived far away, _____ exist cases where childrens start stealing things in the school, then they consume drogs and can finish kill somepeople. People can have a psycholgy problem and can be trate, but when parents don’t do nathing, children do this things, _____ is very important_____ act now, the more time pass the consequences will be worse. Sometimes some people steal for tendence, because in this society if one grope of people do some, all do the same. We should teach to children since kids the difference between good and bad.
Good Job Rocio M.! Be
careful with getting sentences or ideas from somewhere else; it is considered
plagiarism. The final comment is YOUR writing. Pay attention to my corrections.
Your mark is a 7.50
(seven 50/100)
COMMENT 9
1)It is related because crimes always have to be punished, with a big or
little punishment that amend
the crime´s punishment.
3)a)There are a lots of reasons, like traying to fit in different youth social groups, prove who is more worst breaking laws, or they do that to attract atention.
3)b)We can try to do activities to help them, just to distract and move away from that situatios.
4)Crimes in youth people are a serious problem, because we are the "future". They will not have to be criminals. So if we commit crimes, how are going to be the "future"? It is for that the youth people have to rethink, including me, about the crimes we do. There are teenagers that do these crimes because or they have problems in their homes or they are wanting to atract atention, and the result is they break the law. So, we like citizens can help the young people who have problems with crimes trying to making rethink them. Self-help centers are one of these help ways or professionals treatements.
3)a)There are a lots of reasons, like traying to fit in different youth social groups, prove who is more worst breaking laws, or they do that to attract atention.
3)b)We can try to do activities to help them, just to distract and move away from that situatios.
4)Crimes in youth people are a serious problem, because we are the "future". They will not have to be criminals. So if we commit crimes, how are going to be the "future"? It is for that the youth people have to rethink, including me, about the crimes we do. There are teenagers that do these crimes because or they have problems in their homes or they are wanting to atract atention, and the result is they break the law. So, we like citizens can help the young people who have problems with crimes trying to making rethink them. Self-help centers are one of these help ways or professionals treatements.
Franco: Some sentences
are not very clear and in the case of the opinion part I don’t really know if
it is your opinion. Be careful with getting sentences or ideas from somewhere
else; it is considered plagiarism.
Your mark is a 7.
(seven)
COMMENT 10
1)Its related because if you commit a crime there will be always (word order) a punishment.
3a)there its a lot of reasons for me, they just like to do it., some ones are orphans, etc.
3b) We can help them, getting them to do another activity to distract them, or just get them to the psychiatrist, that just if your son is veeeery bad.
4)Teens like to call the attention but maybe they are not bad , it's just the maturing stage and they need someone to guide them and teach them the good way of life.
So in my opinion also that adolescents do bad things because they feel funny that we should give them a chance for them to change.Not in all the cases there is teens that deserve a very bad punishment.
3a)there its a lot of reasons for me, they just like to do it., some ones are orphans, etc.
3b) We can help them, getting them to do another activity to distract them, or just get them to the psychiatrist, that just if your son is veeeery bad.
4)Teens like to call the attention but maybe they are not bad , it's just the maturing stage and they need someone to guide them and teach them the good way of life.
So in my opinion also that adolescents do bad things because they feel funny that we should give them a chance for them to change.Not in all the cases there is teens that deserve a very bad punishment.
Nice Job Julian! I know
you can write a lot more! Keep working!
Your mark is an 8.(eight)
COMMENT 11
I
think teenagers commit crimes because her
parents don't care for where are her
child. Their parents have to take a decision about the education of her child.
One reason of____ increase____ the teen crimes is her parents don't help her child to not commit____ more crimes, because Their parents do they want to steal not receive as much attention as they want.(NOT CLEAR)
They would change if her parents or family question of where____ go, give them a punishment, etc .
Teens now a days(ONE word) commit crimes because they feel better when they commit these crimes and they feel more popular with their friends.
One reason of____ increase____ the teen crimes is her parents don't help her child to not commit____ more crimes, because Their parents do they want to steal not receive as much attention as they want.(NOT CLEAR)
They would change if her parents or family question of where____ go, give them a punishment, etc .
Teens now a days(ONE word) commit crimes because they feel better when they commit these crimes and they feel more popular with their friends.
_Luciana
Good Job Luciana! BUT it needs lots of
improvement. Some parts are not very clear.
Your mark is an 6.50 (six 50/100)
